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A Colourful Night


He was there,
Rain didn't stop him,
Standing outside,
Looking at the cafe's door,
Thinking of her.

After hours of walking,
He was there,
At the same time,
Wondering
If She's inside.
He was thinking of her
All these nights.

He was there,
Rain didn't stop him,
Standing outside,
Looking at the cafe's door.
A car was strangely parked
In front of the door,
Like it was blocking the entrance,
Like a barrier he should overcome...

Her face was clear in his mind
And every time
He was thinking
Of that unique night,
His mind, his heart,
Everything around
Was filled with colours;

He was there,
Rain didn't stop him,
Standing outside,
Looking at the cafe's door,
Thinking of her,
Wondering
If he could live again
That night;

A Colourful Night.
Preview image by: raysheaf
Here is the original which also worked as a source of inspiration: Colorful Night


Mia Nihta Yemati Hromata


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:icontomcranham:
TomCranham Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
That flows really well, with emotion too.
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angeluchiha7 Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2014  Student Artist
 pretty good Heart 
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:iconraysheaf:
raysheaf Featured By Owner May 26, 2014  Professional General Artist
:thumbsup:
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:iconkatiousa15:
katiousa15 Featured By Owner May 26, 2014
Wonderful poem .
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:icondraganthemighty:
DraganTheMighty Featured By Owner May 26, 2014
Thanks.
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:iconkatiousa15:
katiousa15 Featured By Owner May 27, 2014
Welcome.
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:icongammaray3-141:
gammaray3-141 Featured By Owner May 20, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Nice! :D
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:icondraganthemighty:
DraganTheMighty Featured By Owner May 20, 2014
Thanks.
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pollutedpencil Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Beautiful poem about a beautiful mind. Great job!
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:icondraganthemighty:
DraganTheMighty Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2014
Thanks!
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MariaKat00 Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2014
:love::love::love::love:
:love::love::love::love:
:love::love::love::love:
:love::love::love::love:
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:icondraganthemighty:
DraganTheMighty Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2014
Ευχαριστώ.
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shadow-boxer-bunny Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
what happened that night?  Sherlock Holmes
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irishgirl217 Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2013  Hobbyist
Aww. Cute and powerful. :heart: 
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:iconaustinossy:
austinossy Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2013
Amazingly Powerful
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:icondraganthemighty:
DraganTheMighty Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2013
Thanks!
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:icondraganthemighty:
DraganTheMighty Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2013
More than 50 favs!!!!!
Thank you all!!!!!!
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AyeAye12 Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2013  Student Writer
POSITIVE: I like the repetition in each stanza, that really builds up the scene and kinda enforces the idea that it's raining (the repetition of lines = the repetition of the sound of raindrops), while the irregular beats really chop the piece up as if it was rainfall. I like that.

NEGATIVE: I feel you're explaining too much, if that makes sense. As in, instead of showing me through imagery and euphemism things you're just telling me, which makes the read a lot less exciting. Also, it reads with a bit too much prose for me; there are a few things I'd suggest removing which would make the piece a lot smoother, like "cafe's door" to "cafe door", and "All these nights" could do without the "all". 

It's got good potential, but with some tweaking and streamlining it could be drastically improved.
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DraganTheMighty Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2013
You may be right and maybe if I would keep it a little more inside before releasing I would tweak it, but I wanted to be pure and untouched as it came to my mind when I saw raysheaf's painting raysheaf.deviantart.com/art/Co…
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AyeAye12 Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2013  Student Writer
Fair enough; spontaneous creation can be really awesome :D

Just remember poetry never sets; it is the unsettable mould.

Um, yeah. There's your philosophy for the day, enjoy o__O
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DraganTheMighty Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2013
Really thank you for your time and words.
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Jeimii-chan719 Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
ooh, i liked this. it has a nice rhyme to it.
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:icondraganthemighty:
DraganTheMighty Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2013
Thanks!
:love:
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Jeimii-chan719 Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
you're very welcome!!!
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:iconraysheaf:
raysheaf Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2013  Professional General Artist
And I found it excellent!!!
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DraganTheMighty Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2013
Thanks!
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:iconraysheaf:
raysheaf Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2013  Professional General Artist
;-) Will read on soon your other works, just traveling tomorrow so a bit in a rush today.
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:icondraganthemighty:
DraganTheMighty Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2013
Don't worry it happens to me many times. I come just to check, I find sth interesting, but no time to check more.
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