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Watch the stars,
they will blow tonight,
Hold my head,
I have lost my fight

Ease your eyes,
I'm alone tonight,
There's no ice,
I came you to find

I feel sorry,
but it's not  'am shy,
I feel sorry,
I should not deny

I feel sorry,
but this hole of Light
held my senses
all this wasted time

Y ' insisted long,
Now I'll stop denying,
Blind, so wrong,
Not for me such buying

Naughty flirt,
but so pure, 'am  'mazed,
Feel my dirt,
Feel my bitter taste

One more guy
on your working night,
 'feel so dry,
You dragged out my lying.

Thank you lady,
 've treated me so fair,
Fairy not,
but still me I dare

After all,
It is just a night
and the hole;
still It's full of Light.
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AutisticChick Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2014  Student Writer
Not new ideas, but the first two stanzas were memorable and golden, original and unique. Aesthetically arranged, melodic, and wonderful diction choie and sentence construction.

After the first two stanzas the poem fell into something more common and unremarkable, but strive to replicate the quality of that opening in future writing because it was really outstanding.
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DraganTheMighty Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2014
Thanks.
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LegolinEnzian Featured By Owner May 9, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Whoa. Beautiful as usual. Kinda reminds me of the song "Return" by Deine Lakaien.
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DraganTheMighty Featured By Owner May 9, 2014
Thanks.
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LegolinEnzian Featured By Owner May 10, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
You are welcome! :)
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EyiRokafou Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2014
!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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DraganTheMighty Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2014
Ευχαριστώ!!!!!!!!!!!!
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katiousa15 Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2013
Wonderful!!!
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DraganTheMighty Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2013
Thanks.
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katiousa15 Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2013
You are welcome!
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dragonofyang Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Well-written! :) I like how short each stanza is, yet they don't lose the flow of the piece. Very nicely done.
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DraganTheMighty Featured By Owner Nov 11, 2013
Thanks.
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LensLove78 Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2013  Student Photographer
Intense...profund writed,loved the "hole of full Light" concept.
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DraganTheMighty Featured By Owner Nov 11, 2013
Thanks.
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scarletnight25 Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2013  Student Digital Artist
amazing
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DraganTheMighty Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2013
Really Thanks!
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scarletnight25 Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2013  Student Digital Artist
no problem, its really good
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Midnightdragonchaser Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2013
wonderfull
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DraganTheMighty Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2013
Thanks!
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angeluchiha7 Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2013  Student Artist
vary nice
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DraganTheMighty Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2013
Thanks!
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angeluchiha7 Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2013  Student Artist
 your welcome.
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katiousa15 Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2013
Simplicity is sometimes soo amazing!!!!Clap 
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england3 Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
very nice
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DraganTheMighty Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2013
Thanks.
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england3 Featured By Owner Jun 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
welcomes
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NearlyInvisibleMind Featured By Owner May 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Wonderful! :clap: :rose:
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DraganTheMighty Featured By Owner May 27, 2013
Thanks.
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NearlyInvisibleMind Featured By Owner May 28, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome :rose:
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NearlyInvisibleMind Featured By Owner May 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
FYI: I found you through :iconpoetryperfection: :)
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DraganTheMighty Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2013
Thanks a lot!
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ValerieCFrechmann Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is very very well written.
It's such a different style than what I've seen written lately. ( I stick to traditional poetry because poetry is not my special)
I adore it
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DraganTheMighty Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2013
Thanks, a lot!
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