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Love Me Stranger

Love Me Stranger, I See You,
Love Me Stranger, I Need You,
Love Me Stranger, I'll Leave You,
Love Me Stranger; I Know You?
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BailTheSociety Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2014  New member Hobbyist Writer
Its like a whole effin life spilled in four lines.
Love it ^^
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:icondraganthemighty:
DraganTheMighty Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2014
Really thanks!
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:iconerikthewild:
ErikTheWild Featured By Owner May 17, 2014
Hi stranger!
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:iconjimmyroger:
JimmyRoger Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2014
If you meet this stranger again;
Please, tell him that she knows.
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OliviaTheHealer Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2014
Small and powerfull, like a bullet!!!
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:icondraganthemighty:
DraganTheMighty Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2014
Thanks.
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EyiRokafou Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2014
!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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DraganTheMighty Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2014
Ευχαριστώ!!!!!!!!!!!!
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LegolasPanther Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
What an interesting little poem. There is a great motivation of thought brought out in this. If I am correct, it seems you have a Dodoitsu Japanese form on our hands here. As since all the lines proceed each in seven syllables, and four lines altogether. Not often you find one. Thereby adding to your expertise in technique. I also like how you have created an audible refrain in your work, which expresses the emotions for the mysterious stranger.

Refrains are vital to any type of poetry and create a new message each time even though those same words/phrases are used. In using them the way you did, it created a surprising impact on what I felt about the 'stranger'. I like how you have created this work and hope for you to continue with such amazing talent!

As I would like to know, I did not add much to vision, for the poem concerned the emotions between the individual and the stranger.

Sincerely

~LegolasPanther~

Vision 3.5/5
Originality 5/5
Technique 5/5
Impact 5/5
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DraganTheMighty Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2014
Really thanks, but I have to say one thing about the technique. I work more with my ears.
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