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Love Me Stranger

Love Me Stranger, I See You,
Love Me Stranger, I Need You,
Love Me Stranger, I'll Leave You,
Love Me Stranger; I Know You?
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:iconjimmyroger:
If you meet this stranger again;
Please, tell him that she knows.
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:iconoliviathehealer:
Small and powerfull, like a bullet!!!
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:iconeyirokafou:
!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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:icondraganthemighty:
Ευχαριστώ!!!!!!!!!!!!
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:iconlegolaspanther:
LegolasPanther Jan 19, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
What an interesting little poem. There is a great motivation of thought brought out in this. If I am correct, it seems you have a Dodoitsu Japanese form on our hands here. As since all the lines proceed each in seven syllables, and four lines altogether. Not often you find one. Thereby adding to your expertise in technique. I also like how you have created an audible refrain in your work, which expresses the emotions for the mysterious stranger.

Refrains are vital to any type of poetry and create a new message each time even though those same words/phrases are used. In using them the way you did, it created a surprising impact on what I felt about the 'stranger'. I like how you have created this work and hope for you to continue with such amazing talent!

As I would like to know, I did not add much to vision, for the poem concerned the emotions between the individual and the stranger.

Sincerely

~LegolasPanther~

Vision 3.5/5
Originality 5/5
Technique 5/5
Impact 5/5
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:icondraganthemighty:
Really thanks, but I have to say one thing about the technique. I work more with my ears.
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LegolasPanther Jan 20, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
That is fine! :-) I know another writer on here who is the same :-)
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