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It was so silent on the hill,
She could hear her steps,
Her breath...
A look at the watch;
Time's not passing,
Not going away,
Like a friend who waits, insists;
Begs
That she must do something at last.
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FridgePoetProject Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
This is absolutely beautiful.  Time really does stand still while you're reading it.  Truly lovely piece.  Well done! 
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DraganTheMighty Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks.
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janethkiller123 Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
lovely 
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DraganTheMighty Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks.
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danielluster81 Featured By Owner Dec 6, 2014  Professional Digital Artist
Great poem!=D
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DraganTheMighty Featured By Owner Dec 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks!
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danielluster81 Featured By Owner Dec 6, 2014  Professional Digital Artist
You're welcome!=D
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Jomoku Featured By Owner Oct 10, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
It was so loud.. on the hill.
He could see his steps.
His breath...
A look at his wrist.
His pulse was passing.
Going away,
Like an enemy who waits, insists;
Demanding.
That he must do nothing.
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DraganTheMighty Featured By Owner Oct 11, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
This is excellent!!!
You should upload it!
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angeluchiha7 Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2014  Student Artist
pretty cool
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DraganTheMighty Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks.
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angeluchiha7 Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2014  Student Artist
your welcome ^-^
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TheDawnMarie Featured By Owner May 8, 2014  Professional General Artist
awesome
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DraganTheMighty Featured By Owner May 8, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks.
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C-blaze21 Featured By Owner May 6, 2014
Pretty good.
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DraganTheMighty Featured By Owner May 7, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks.
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MariaKat00 Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2014
!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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DraganTheMighty Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Ευχαριστώ.
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adamantRavel Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I've been trying to find some suitable words for about ten minutes.
Hmh.

Thank you.
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DraganTheMighty Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Glad I helped you.
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mittens150 Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2014  Student General Artist
Really cool!
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DraganTheMighty Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks.
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mittens150 Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2014  Student General Artist
You're very welcome!
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Lunasaraka Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Awesome :D I'm just curious, was the game silent hill involved in this at all? XD
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DraganTheMighty Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
...Not directly the game. It happened to hear the title of the movie from the rights lips at my right breath.
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Lunasaraka Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Coolio XD 
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KaizenKitty Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2014  Student Writer
Love this poem because everything in it, the structure and choice of words, it all works to deliver your message. This is a superb example of Free Verse. I think it should get a DD.
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DraganTheMighty Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Really Thanks!
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KaizenKitty Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2014  Student Writer
welcome
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PersephonedeHades Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2014
Love it! 
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DraganTheMighty Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks.
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TrainerHarmony Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist

I liked it! I was refreshing my inbox messages and started reading this, then had to read the rest. It's amazing! Love it! :heart:

Keep up the good work~ :music:

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DraganTheMighty Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Glad you like it!
Really thanks for your words.
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TrainerHarmony Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
You're very welcome~ :music:
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Kagehahen Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2014
You prove like many before you, that good poetry does not have to be long and ponderous stroke.  And that creative breath can be caught in just a moment - a casual idea in passing is all it takes to do more than just exist - but awaken and fall deeply and remember. 

Nice work.
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DraganTheMighty Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
You said it all, no matter how successful this or other I've written, me or anyone else:

Witches have the spell,
Poets have the breath.
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CobaltOfMarch Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2014
This is a very beautiful poem. I like the concept. It's like being stuck somewhere - nowhere - with no words left to say and so little time do what we know we have to. 
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DraganTheMighty Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks.
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Messerfly Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2014
This has a wonderful flow and feel to it. I just have one question, was the use of capitals on all the words deliberate? Because I personally found it a little bit distracting. But other than that wonderful, It hints at a really strong backstory.
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DraganTheMighty Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
You are right!
Initially it was not capital, then it was capital, plus a little fix, now it's this.

You know sometimes with a spontaneous inspiration I do such mistakes on the "format".
Your comment came at the time and as, it doesn't  really has to do with the "heart" of the poem, you helped me decide.

Thanks!!!
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Messerfly Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2014
That is ok :)
Writing is all about experimentation.
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