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Your Only Hope


Shadows Of Words
Hung Onto Your Cables
Fading Out,
Like Your Hope,
Secretly Whispering
"Defeat Is Coming"
...And The Reaper Is Your Only Hope...



Shadows Of Words


...And The Reaper Is Your Only Hope...
"Defeat Is Coming"
Secretly Whispering
Like Your Hope,
Fading Out,
Hung Onto Your Cables
Shadows Of Words
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:iconkittilovespassion:
KittiLovesPassion Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2015  Student Digital Artist
Nightwish
They MUST.
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Sebas-chanXGrell Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2015  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Oh my death!!! That was beautiful!! Almost as beautiful as me...
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DraganTheMighty Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2015
You must be very beautiful!!!
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:icondaviderious:
Daviderious Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2015  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
good idea
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DraganTheMighty Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2015
Thanks.
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:iconnestharon:
Nestharon Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2014   Writer
The style is brilliant.
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:icondraganthemighty:
DraganTheMighty Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2014
Glad you like it.
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angeluchiha7 Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2014  Student Artist
awesome
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:iconwingdiamond:
WingDiamond Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2014
:rage:Shadows of war, screamin' past lies 
Shadows of war, emotional ties !

Nice poem!
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DraganTheMighty Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2014
Thanks.
Nice song.
In general I don't do this, but draganthemighty.deviantart.com…
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DraganTheMighty Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2014
Thanks.
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MariaKat00 Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2014
!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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:icondraganthemighty:
DraganTheMighty Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2014
Ευχαριστώ.
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C-blaze21 Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2014
Dark.
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DraganTheMighty Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2013
50 Favs!!!
Really Thank You All!!!!!!!!!!!
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:iconnaikki:
naikki Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2013
Excellent concept - wonderful style.

(from a greek-born, american)
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DraganTheMighty Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2013
Thank you!!!
I'm not only greek-born. I was born in Greece, I live in Greece and I haven't travelled outside.
As a child I learnt some English on a standard low level, but English "invaded" in my life though music, technology and of course movies and I liked it enough to start writing original pieces like or try to render my greek works.
I'm really happy that my words can "work" enough for people whose english is their native language.
Really thank you!!!!
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Cataclystiq Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Hi there! That was a very unique style of writing. A form of concrete writing..? Well anyway in terms of originality, the thought was outstanding, technique was simply superb, and impact was really good too :). But I thought that the poem needs to be a bit more refined. Its good, but it can be much more.

Perhaps replacing "secretly whispering" with "whispering a secret" in both paragraphs may add more depth and convey a better meaning since the second stanza had somewhat conflicting meanings.
Also, it'd be much better as a poem if you made it a little longer. Anyone would want to read a little more of something as beautifully executed as this, but also, with poems of this sort, the more skillfully you lengthen it, the more impactful it is. I don't have much to say in terms of improvement because I didn't find it lacking much. But consider the above points if you like!
Cheers!
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DraganTheMighty Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2013
For the length, you are right. I just didn't insist after the initial idea, because this is sth experimental for the "whispering secret" I don't know, it's not yet frozen in me, but as you are the reader again you it's more possible that you are right.
Thank you!!!
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Cataclystiq Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Actually, the poem is supposed to be only what the writer needs it to be :). Critiques are only meant to give you additional insight for improvement, not necessarily change. When you change a poem too much, it stops saying what you want it to say- thats no different from stripping it off its origin, so no mate :P, as a reader its less likely I'd be able to understand your emotions and hence your poem :P.
Well anyway, philosophy aside,lengthening it would be better!
And you're most welcome :D
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Thunderchild-Actual Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
nice. good take on the original. neatly reverses the poem. making a seemingly positive ending. clever.
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DraganTheMighty Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2013
Thanks!
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DraganTheMighty Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2013
For those who haven't seen the original:

Your Only Hope


Shadows Of Words
Hung Onto Your Cables
Fading Out
Like Your Hope
Secretly Whispering
That Defeat Is Coming
And The Reaper Is Your Only Hope.
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DraganTheMighty Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2013
TheeEmmyKay Thank you so much!!!!!!
:love:
[link]
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lena-lawliet Featured By Owner Jun 20, 2013   General Artist
Lovely piece, reminds me of a time in a hospital, hearing the news about my great gran. Terribly lovely, deary.
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DraganTheMighty Featured By Owner Jun 20, 2013
I've been in the hospital, but I didn't feel that way. The hard times came after the hospital feeling so alone in the house. This poem wasn't written those days, but that period heavily marked me.
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Unabiding Featured By Owner Jun 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Every time I read this poem, I get something else out of it. It's wonderful :3 :o
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MarcoEmma Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2013
Amazing! :wow:
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TheeEmmyKay Featured By Owner Jun 12, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
What I truly love about this is if you reverse it, and from the last line up, it seems almost like they're accepting the Reaper to them instead of realising that it is their only option. This really paints a picture, read both ways. Bravo!
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DraganTheMighty Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2013
Shadows Of Words


The Reaper Is Your Only Hope
Defeat Is Coming
Secretly Whispering
Like Your Hope
Fading Out
Hung Onto Your Cables
Shadows Of Words.
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TheeEmmyKay Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Yes exactly! Both are excellent!
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DraganTheMighty Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2013
Thanks for the idea! Reverse reading was not my intention.
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TheeEmmyKay Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
No problem! I just love poems of that nature and have an eye for them!

My favourite is Jonathan Reed's Lost Generation, it's a classic.
You should give it a read, it's worth it. [link]
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DraganTheMighty Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2013
It's nice! Thanks for the link.
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TheeEmmyKay Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
No problem! :)
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:iconharothar:
HaroThar Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2013
I find this oddly captivating.
Like, I suddenly want to write about it, only I have no idea what I'd write.
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DraganTheMighty Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2013
For me the path was REDEMPTION, then Your Poetry Sucks and finally this.
If you reverse the path it might help, if not to write, right now, at least to clear the "thing" in your mind.
[link]
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:iconharothar:
HaroThar Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2013
You sent me the link to Redemption twice ^_^
But it's nice.
I'm no poet, I do novel/stories :3
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DraganTheMighty Featured By Owner Jun 10, 2013
Just born inspired reading Your Poetry Sucks by ~Shadowsoflosthope.
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