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Your Only Hope


Shadows Of Words
Hung Onto Your Cables
Fading Out,
Like Your Hope,
Secretly Whispering
"Defeat Is Coming"
...And The Reaper Is Your Only Hope...



Shadows Of Words


...And The Reaper Is Your Only Hope...
"Defeat Is Coming"
Secretly Whispering
Like Your Hope,
Fading Out,
Hung Onto Your Cables
Shadows Of Words
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:rage:Shadows of war, screamin' past lies 
Shadows of war, emotional ties !

Nice poem!
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:icondraganthemighty:
Thanks.
Nice song.
In general I don't do this, but draganthemighty.deviantart.com…
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:iconmariakat00:
!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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:icondraganthemighty:
Ευχαριστώ.
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:icondraganthemighty:
50 Favs!!!
Really Thank You All!!!!!!!!!!!
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:iconnaikki:
Excellent concept - wonderful style.

(from a greek-born, american)
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:icondraganthemighty:
Thank you!!!
I'm not only greek-born. I was born in Greece, I live in Greece and I haven't travelled outside.
As a child I learnt some English on a standard low level, but English "invaded" in my life though music, technology and of course movies and I liked it enough to start writing original pieces like or try to render my greek works.
I'm really happy that my words can "work" enough for people whose english is their native language.
Really thank you!!!!
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Cataclystiq Jul 9, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Hi there! That was a very unique style of writing. A form of concrete writing..? Well anyway in terms of originality, the thought was outstanding, technique was simply superb, and impact was really good too :). But I thought that the poem needs to be a bit more refined. Its good, but it can be much more.

Perhaps replacing "secretly whispering" with "whispering a secret" in both paragraphs may add more depth and convey a better meaning since the second stanza had somewhat conflicting meanings.
Also, it'd be much better as a poem if you made it a little longer. Anyone would want to read a little more of something as beautifully executed as this, but also, with poems of this sort, the more skillfully you lengthen it, the more impactful it is. I don't have much to say in terms of improvement because I didn't find it lacking much. But consider the above points if you like!
Cheers!
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